Look

I’ve been tagged by the wonderful author Dianne Gray for a blogging game: find the word “look” in one of your old pieces of writing, and post it with its surrounding paragraphs on your blog.

At first I didn’t think I had anything – or nothing very good anyway. My first actual long-ish manuscript, I am not very happy with, and another short beginning of a story is filed away – I can’t look at it because I’m using the idea for NaNoWriMo.

So I was looking around in my old files on the computer, and came across a very very short bit of writing (I had started trying to rewrite a novella).

I was very unhappy with it (it was not true to my original idea) and abandoned it quickly, but in itself, it wasn’t a very bad bit of writing. And it had one instance of the word look! xD Also, I have another story I could extract a couple of paragraphs from, but the file is not on my computer, so I could post it later I guess.

But anyway here is my “Look” extract. πŸ˜€

———-

“Yes?” The man had clear blue eyes and shiny gelled black hair. She had been told his name was Scott. Scott Pendry. Miss Marlow found herself smiling at him again.
“Retta’s attendance is sporadic, to say the least. I -”
“Yeah, she’s frequently sick,” Mr Pendry interrupted.
Miss Marlow could see a girl standing in the background. She had long black hair and dark shadows under her eyes. Her face was tear-stained and her eyes large and frightened. With a jolt Miss Marlow realised that this was Retta. It was such a contrast to how Retta appeared at school; confident and cheery, popular with her classmates. This girl looked somehow younger and so vulnerable.

———-

It’s unpolished, but it’s what I have at the moment. Thanks for reading! πŸ˜€

– Tarina

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2 Responses to Look

  1. diannegray says:

    I loved your ‘look’!!! πŸ˜€

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